Plot/story elements:

Did I feel attached to the story or poem?

I love it when poetry introduces the chapter. It really sets the tone. I love how the chimes also affected Martha.


Would I recommend this piece of writing to someone else?

This is soo Edgar Allen Poeish. I loved it! I could even see Vincent Price playing the part of James.


Was there a clear purpose to it?

A great insanity thriller. Loved it! Had just the right amount of suspense in the climax and a terrifying ending. Awesome job!


Glows:

You hit the insanity nail on the head. Martha had to be distraught from all of Lucifer's work.



Grows:

Just an observation, it was a pretty stark transition between James and Martha living peacefully and then the chime incident. It seems to me like there might be events that happended before.

Also, I want to know more about how Martha must have been feeling. The only decription I got was her bewildered eyes. Maybe you could add a sentence or two about her terrifying experience.



Miscellaneous Comments:

It's interesting that the Chinese built wind chimes 5,000 years ago to ward of evil spirits. I looked up while reading this because I was interested to see if they had a superstitious start.

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~Tsa~ House of Greyjoy







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