Title of Work: : The Magic History Book
Author of Work: :Zoey Rae
Date: : July 2, 2016

Plot:
Character, Tommy must fight for his life through the world of a history book in order to return home.

Scene/Setting:
There are a jumble of scenes and settings in this Novella. The writer is taking us through history to events which are happening. The traveler is holding a book which is mentally talking to him. The book has granted Tommy's wish of living the history he so liked reading about. He will be jumping in and out of people's bodies just as a point of history takes place.

Characters:
History book - personified
Tommy - time traveler
Various characters in history

Suggestions:
Interesting concept of personifying a History Book to cause a person to Time travel. I found the story a little lacking in some of the finer, emotions... example Tommy kills Martin Luther King but basically feels nothing. There are two chapters to the Novella (3492). I know you are continuing with this, because a Novella is at least 17,500 words. I am also thinking you are a history buff. It will take a lot of hard work to pick out times when Tommy can react to what is going on. His reactions need to be stronger, much stronger. If you found yourself holding all of a sudden holding a gun and staring down the barrel at someone you were going to kill I think you would be having a stronger internal dialogue with yourself.

Generally the writing is very good and I can picture what is happening, but only because I have lived through the examples you have given so far. Maybe if you talk with people who were around and heard the news and had some thoughts on the subject. Don't just read the history books.


Character Count: 1,483 (tags = 222 Characters)

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