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 The Witch's Diary Part II Open in new Window. [18+]
The diary's secrets are revealed Part II
by Arakun the twisted raccoon Author Icon
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
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I am reading these two pieces back to back without a long pause in between.

In beginning to read from Part 1 to Part 2 it does not quite flow right. The end of part one Melissa is suppose to be reading a book. But now it's she's playing with her dog. I figured that you would write something about her reading the book for the first time. It would pick up where you left off. Yet now that I have read the whole thing I see it does. Then again I see where if you read it separately, as in a random story, this beginning would make more sense.
What did the book feel like coming out of her pocket?
The flow in the story just keeps holding on and not letting me go.Unlike before when I proposed a pause in a conversation. Now I would not change anything. How did her father see the creature? Why did no one else see the creature? Aiming the gun at the family, I was not thinking that, interesting twist. I was thinking suicide and I like the fact that she was alive when the family left. What was the excuse that her father made to people for leaving? Just have to find out in the next story.

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