Plot/story elements:

Did I feel attached to the story or poem?

The beginning is very strong and fast paced! I can feel what's happening, riveted from the beginning! I would very much like to see how this story unfolds. How does William get used to living in the modern world?


Would I recommend this piece of writing to someone else?

Wow. It's like a reversed Outlander. It's a pretty cool concept. I love the idea of someone from the past coming to present day, why not? Yes, I think enough people would love this idea given that Outlander is so popular right now.


Was there a clear purpose to it?

I think it's going to be a love story. After all she knew his name was William and it's marked as a romance. It almost sets the woman up to be the protector which would be very empowering role for a female character. I like that angle a lot.


Glows:

The writing is so fast paced, I felt like I was watching a movie! I could almost cast their roles. Your writing is also very descriptive. For example the description of the light was so detailed, I could see it fan out among the trees and grow.



Grows:

I would of made the witch young and beautiful just to put some sensual tension there but it may not be appropriate for the story your building. It was a five! Congratulations on the publishing! Good luck! I know I'd like to keep reading.



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~Tsa~ House of Greyjoy







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