Hi ♥tHiNg♥ ,

This review is a part of "Game of Thrones"  [13+].

Overall Impression:

This is an interesting poem, dear Hoovsie. It made me think. It speaks of life, and death, abuse, strength, tragedy. A strong poem.

There are many things to love about it. The move through the different seasons, which you use well, both as the life of the tree, and the woman, and those who would harm her. I love the strength you describe - no matter how people put you down, harm you, think that they have beaten you, a defiant spirit won't be crushed. And everyone will have their comeuppance eventually.

I love the imagery. It's beautiful, and vivid, and it painted a clear picture in my mind.

On the technical side of things, your poem reads well. I could easily pick up on the rhythm and flow. It's well-presented. And I love your use of punctuation. This aids the overall clarity and the reading experience.

You write that it's a work in progress. I'd like to see what you will do with it. As it stands, though, I like it just the way it is. It ended on a very strong note.

Suggestions:

I do have a couple of suggestions. I hope that you will find them helpful!

Stanza 3:

I think that the word "souvenier" in the second line should be "souvenir".

General Suggestion:

I really love that you allow the capitalisation at the beginning of each line to depend on the individual sentences within the piece. This really assists the overall clarity of the item. However, there are a couple of places where you do begin a line with a capital letter, despite it not being the start of a new sentence. That might be worth a look.

My Rating:

As you can no doubt tell from my review, I loved this poem. I was happy to find it when browsing through your portfolio.

I did have a couple of suggestions, but those were just tiny things. For that reason, I will give this item a rating of 4.5 out of 5.

Thank you so much for sharing your work, and write on!

Kit




My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .