Hi Stephen Scorer ,

This review is a part of "Game of Thrones"  [13+].

Overall Impression:

This is a good poem, dear author. I feel that it deals well with the issue of anxiety. I especially like that it contains a message of hope. Of healing.

Anxiety is horrible. It does come on like a wave, which threatens to drown the sufferer. But it can be overcome, step by little step. You learn to ride the wave, know it for what it is, and once you do that, well, of course it is still not pleasant, but it sends you in a forward direction. Indeed, you can learn again to appreciate your life, and appreciate yourself.

On the technical side of things, your poem reads well. I had no trouble picking up on its rhythm and flow. I like your use of punctuation, and that you allow the capitalisation at the beginning of each line to depend on the individual sentences within the piece. This aids the overall clarity and reading experience.

Suggestions:

I do have some suggestions, dear author. I hope that you will find them helpful!

Stanza 1:

you might enjoy it you little minx.

I would place a comma before "you", to assist the rhythm.

Stanza 3:

I would be tempted to change the word "and" in the final line to "nor". That is what my mind wants to read it as.

Stanza 5:

The second "your" in the final line should be "you're".

My Rating:

This is a good poem, dealing with something important in an uplifting way. I was glad to read it.

I did have some suggestions, but nothing major. Therefore, I will give this item a rating of 4.5 out of 5.

Thank you for sharing your work, and write on!

Kit




My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .