Plot/story elements:

Did I feel attached to the story or poem?

The first verse is so hopeful and optimistic, a great challenge presented with great opportunity. I was instantly engaged. A grand adventure in a great tower. I loved the idea of introducing a crow into this piece.

Would I recommend this piece of writing to someone else?

It has a great story to it. It reminds me of the point and click adventure games with a great mystery and landscape complete with puzzles you must solve to get to the next challenge. I wonder what the contents of the book are.


Was there a clear purpose to it?

A great exploration to find a book of White magic. In this tower's a story untold. You can feel the mystery in that line. What is the story? I hope one day you expand this to a story and unfold the mystery that lies beneath the book of White Magic.


Glows:

The poem reads like a story with a greater mystery behind it. I love the description of rusted tools, a random book, old lanterns. You can feel the age of the scenery with the rusting and old items in the midst of the mysterious room and bookshelf.



Grows:

I use ellipses all the time but I'm not sure I like them in poetry. It's different. I can't decide.



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~Tsa~ House of Greyjoy







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