Title of Work: : First Dive
Author of Work: : Geoffrey Robson
Date: : July 15

Plot:
Monologue about a twelve year old boy jumps in the water at the end of a jetty in South Florida

Scene/Setting:
A twelve year old boy goes the end of a jetty in South Florida with his brother. The brother has brought along a aqualung, a regulator and two five pound weights for him. He puts the equipment on, with the weights in his back pocket, and his brother tells him to jump in, which he does, no questions asked. When he finally remembers to take a breathe he is enthralled with the world around him. He sees eels and fish. He finds a lot of Florida lobster (the year is 1960 so there was still an abundance of sea life around the Southern coast of Florida). Thinking it would be good to have some kind of suvenier he breaks the tail off the lobster and lets the head float away. At first it is just interesting to watch the other members of the sea life nibble away at the head and even the tail he held in his hand. When a Barracuda decides to get into the feeding frenzy, the author drops the tail he is holding and moves away. He did not want to become part of the snack.

Swimming back to the surface, he immediately wants to find out where to get the aqualung refilled so he can do it again.

Characters:
Geoffrey - author
Geoffrey's brother
A lot of fish

Suggestions:
I am from South Florida and I could relate to this story. You did a great job of showing how a twelve year old boy would feel in this situation. I wonder what his next adventure would be. I would be willing to bet you are a diver even to this day.

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