Plot/story elements:

Did I feel attached to the story or poem?

I hardly ever read stories where the main character isn't human. It's a unique trait to write in the point of view in an animal and I love that you didn't give it away wholly until the end. It was somewhat of a surprise trying to figure out why all of Eliana's friends were caught in a net.


Would I recommend this piece of writing to someone else?

I think it's a good idea to read pieces like this to help us create or at least relate to different perspectives. I think it's important to stretch the idea of adopting different perspectives when we write, ultimately, it just serves to make us better writers.

Was there a clear purpose to it?

Eliana wants to save her friends and she leads them out of the net. Good for her, she found an opening and took it.


Glows:

It's written in a creative point of view. My favorite part is the ending and the surprise to find out Eliana was in fact a bird. There were hints given all along but it didn't ruin the ending.


Grows:

I would change subtle parts like there was a line of daffodils to something like a line of daffodils blazed white in the sunlight or something like that. You came up with lines like the sun was smiling so I know you use a lot of creativity when you write so it's more just a suggestion to edit your pieces with a fine tooth comb.



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~Tsa~ House of Greyjoy







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