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 | Might Have Been  [18+] A quickie between co-workers that wonder what might have been if they had a relationship.  |
| (4.5)| Review brought to you by: "Game of Thrones" by Creeper Of The Realm  PLOT - Roxy and Tony are co-workers, who share intimate glances during working hours, but never go further than that. The attraction is evident with every glance they share. Tony just cannot put himself out there and tell her how he really feels, but one night at the bar and a few drinks, his inhibitions take over and he finds the courage to make his move. SETTING - Good insight into Tony's feelings, how he tries to control them, and the descriptions of Roxy, all the way down to her stiletto heels. It was great seeing her through his eyes. You had her described perfectly. Even in the bathroom stall it was like having a birds eye view of this couple. CHARACTERS - Tony likes women, but has trouble expressing his feelings to them, especially to Roxy. She is that one woman that takes his breath away, and makes him tongue tied and shy, the one he wishes he could speak to and find out if they are compatible. GRAMMAR/SPELLING/DIALOGUE - Their bodies pressed together against the flimsy wall of the poorly lit stall, breathing hardly do you mean hard? THOUGHTS - Good solid story of a work place romance. When their co-workers started looking for them, I really thought they were going to be interrupted and not get to finish what they started. Nice happy ending. Write on!   
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