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 | Heart in a Cage  [E] A poem about waiting for something to happen. And the agony of time  |
| (4.0)| Review brought to you by: "Game of Thrones" by Gaby ~ Way behind!  Rhythm/Rhyme: Some stanzas had good rhyme and flow from one to the next. The others had longer sentences and pulled away from the flow as you worked to convey feelings of love and longing. Summary: Time moves every so slowing as she waits, longing for the one she loves to remember her, to return, almost begging the clock to move swiftly and willing him back to her. Critique: I love romantic pieces and you had some really good stanzas filled with emotion about love and longing. I understood what you were trying to convey. When it came to the clock and how time was being cruel as she waiting, willing the hands to move faster, it got a little lost. There is a point where if felt like she loved the hands of time, that she loved the clock. But the next stanza returns to the longing and wondering if he has finally recognized that they belong together. The reference to her heart being in a cage was used well, brought images of someone being stuck, not knowing how to move forward, as if their entire being was locked in that cage waiting for love to come claim her. Write on! Review brought to you by: "Game of Thrones" by Gaby ~ Way behind!  
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You responded to this review 07/18/2016 @ 1:19pm EDT