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 I Let Him Down Open in new Window. [ASR]
My friend died. It should have been me. Grand prize Honoring our Veteran's July 2012.
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
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PLOT -
His partner is still alive, but he didn't make it. Grief is strong, as is his feelings of failure for letting him down. Being here, while his best friend is laid to rest is a very hard pill to swallow, and he finds he cannot leave until he's completely laid to rest.

SETTING -
The funeral is very moving, and sad. The guilt at being the one left behind is powerful shown well. It was easy to picture the burial, with the guns going off, and him staying close to his best friends wife, watching everything, taking it all in, yet still consumed by sorry and guilt.

CHARACTERS -
A soldiers best friend is just as brokenhearted as his family and cannot seem to cope with all of it.

GRAMMAR/SPELLING/DIALOGUE -
Inner dialog from this perspective was very touching. I found no spelling or grammatical errors.

THOUGHTS -
It's not often we get the perspective of our loyal pets. How often do we wonder what they are thinking and feeling? Yet somehow we manage to convey these feelings to one another. I loved the picture you included at the end to show just how his dog stayed near, refusing to leave his partner for even a second. Nicely done. Write on!
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