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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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PLOT -
Interesting tale from both points of view, the dragons who willing want a human sacrifice, and the human who hates this tradition, knowing if they pick the wrong slip of paper their fate is sealed and life will end. Or will it?

SETTING -
Good moments as the dragon reached into the bowl with his blue claw. Also with the lottery drawing and how that red x meant sure death to whoever held it. The young girl chained the post as she awaited her fate was easy to picture in my mind.

CHARACTERS -
The young dragon who goes out to see what the day will bring, only to realize the young girl wouldn't make for a good meal. He instead is seeking friendship. The young girl who is terrified, ready to strike with her knife and fight to the death if necessary.

GRAMMAR/SPELLING/DIALOGUE -
She stood at the ready, a long knife in her hand.

~The dialog was believable. Only the one missing word stood out.

THOUGHTS -
I enjoyed this one, especially the ending. I hope you extend this story, expand where the young girl and dragon go from here. I could easily see a fast friendship ready to form between the pair. Now that would make for an wonderful sequel as they share different adventures together. Write on!
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