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Review of Never Too Late to Learn

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions. This review was done for the Game of Crowns contest.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

Unable to ride a bike her new boyfriend wants veronica to go bike riding. What a dilemma. She has been afraid of bike riding ever since she fell as a small child and scarred her knee.

PLOT & CHARACTERS:

Veronica is with Brian, her new boyfriend, and she is shy and afraid of riding a bicyle. He talks her into trying with him holding on to her. She is enjoying the placement of his hands against her as he assists her in learning to ride the bike. However she tries and eventually falls cutting knew already scarred knee. Brian comes to her aid and the rest of the story is left to our own imagination.


SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

I would have liked to see Veronica flirt with brain a little more.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

Keep writing and sharing your stories with us.

dblameck


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