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Title of Work: : The Dragon Rider Origin Story, Chapter One (Book, Fantasy)
Author of Work: : airplane1285
Date: : July 23

Plot:
"Jessica Has been a slave most of her life. Recently turning eighteen she has been sold for more than any other and marched to her new home...."

Scene/Setting:
Jessica has turned eighteen years old and is being taken to a town. She starts out being tied to the side of a wagon and led into thrown. She is taken through several gates and ends up at a villa. She is allowed to clean herself in a tub and is given a new pink, thin shift to wear. A magical collar is placed around her neck. The collar will force her to obey her new Master.

She is sent to a room, where a very large short man enters. It is not hard to figure out what he wants to do as he forces her to lie on the bed and begins to undo her robe. Suddenly the town is being attacked and Jessica ends up being sent out to help with the fight. Jessica keep hearing a voice in her head, telling her how to fight and even to don the armor of a slain attacker. The guard which has been sent with her, helps her. The voice says he is talking to her through her mind so be careful how she answers what he says.

Characters:
Jessica
Wagon Guard
Guard at the gate.
Older man with white hair
New Master

Suggestions:
This is a very interesting story. I hope to have the time soon to read more of it. You are very talented. Write on!

Character Count: 1,232 (tags = 173 Characters above this point)
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