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| Review brought to you by: "Game of Thrones" by Gaby  Rhythm/Rhyme: You had good rhymes in each stanza. It flowed rather well. Summary: Description of a wicked storm that rushes in from the eye of the watcher. You had really good imagery of the thunder and lightning, the rains quieting the leaves, taking away the sun and birdsong. The last stanza was my favorite: my new love dancing...this was such a great visual and really brought home the intensity of the storm outside. Critique: You brought the storm to life so the reader could see it through your eyes easily. You did really well painting the picture and bringing the images right off the page. The poem had good flow from one stanza to the next, and the rhymes worked. But that last stanza really pulled me in. The glow between earth and sky is a great line. It captures so much of the lightning show, and yes, sometimes it's a show as it crackles across the sky and makes it impossible to look away from it. That's what I imagined when I read that stanza. Good job with this poem and capturing the essence of the storm, as well as the changes that take place just before the rain hits. Write on!  
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You responded to this review 07/25/2016 @ 1:56pm EDT