Hi ~ Aqua ~ ,

This review is a part of "Game of Thrones"  [13+].

Overall Impression:

This is a sad, touching poem, dear Aqua. The slow death of a relationship, where people drift apart. It asks the question how they began, and where they end. Two questions that are often difficult to answer.

It is horrible to have once been so close to someone, and to lose that, bit by bit, as they withdraw into their own world, for whatever reason. You still love them, and wonder if they still love you, or feel anything for you.

On the technical side of things, this poem reads well. It has a good rhythm and flow. I like your use of punctuation, as this helps guide the reader and enhances the overall clarity. And I love that you allow the capitalisation at the beginning of each line to depend upon the individual sentences within the piece. This perfects the overall clarity and reading experience. Great job!

Suggestions:

I have no suggestions, dear Aqua. I could spot no errors, nor did I see anything I felt that you could improve upon.

My Rating:

A powerful, touching poem. You have created a good read here.

I had no suggestions. So, I will give this item the 5 out of 5 rating it deserves.

Thank you for sharing your work, and write on!

Kit



My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .