Hi tinydancer12,

This review is a part of "Game of Thrones"  [13+].

Overall Impression:

This is a powerful, touching poem, dear author. I think that it's one that many people will be able to relate to. I know that I can.

Life goes on, yes, but the initial shock and impact of a tragic event can overwhelm us. This poem does a good job at expressing our feelings at such a time - the difficulty finding the right words, the anger, the difficulty concentrating, the awkwardness of a smile when it should be the time to grieve. Time helps make all this easier, as you say. But it is always good to remember that all those feelings are perfectly natural.

On the technical side of things, this poem reads well. It has a good rhythm and flow. It is nicely presented. I love your use of punctuation - this helps guide the reader and enhances the overall clarity. And I love that you allow the capitalisation at the beginning of each line to depend upon the individual sentences within the piece. Well done!

Suggestions:

I have no suggestions, dear author. Not helpful, I know, but I could find no errors, nor did I see anything that I felt you could improve upon. Your poem works for me.

My Rating:

This is a powerful poem, with a good message.

I had no suggestions. So, I will give this item the 5 out of 5 rating it deserves.

Thank you for sharing your work, and write on!

Kit



My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .