Plot/story elements:

Did I feel attached to the story or poem?

I am definitely sensing she has been in touch with other worldly entities. Did one of them entice her to take the bottle or did she take it of her own volition? It's an ominous situation and am wondering how it will get resolved. Oh! The promontory is off their property! I didn't catch that in the first review. I have the same buring question, is it evil or just an adventure? I like the idea of it being a time warp machine but we'll see how the story develops!

Would I recommend this piece of writing to someone else?

I'm going come back to this story when the contest is done. Yes, I think the story is pretty good and holds the reader's' attention throughout. I wonder which way the story is going to go.


Was there a clear purpose to it?

It still holds much suspense but now the house is more alive than it was and starting to suck Peter and Julie into its history. Is it benevolent or other worldly? I guess the story will reveal itself as I continue to read.


Glows:

The story stays riveting through chapter 2. I want to keep going. I love the way Julie and Peter play off each other. I always think that' the mark of great writing when you can really get an idea of who the characters are. The dialog went a long way in painting their character development.



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~Tsa~ House of Greyjoy







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