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 |  | Curt Butt  [13+] Curt seeks to ruin someone, but is he successful?  |
| (4.0)| Review brought to you by: "Game of Thrones" by Gaby  PLOT - Curt does not like gays and sets out to ruin a childhood acquaintance's life who he feels doesn't deserve his wealthy upbringing either. He sets out on a course of destruction, excited as his plan is put into motion, just waiting to watch the fallout and gain some satisfaction. SETTING - CHARACTERS - Really good insight into your characters evil mind as he steps up his plan and puts it into motion. He always has that weird quirk of losing his hair. GRAMMAR/SPELLING/DIALOGUE - besides working as a computer-controlled tool operator, that it/is? Instead [comma] he turned his hatred into snide comments and working behind the scenes. Leave him down and dirty, crawling in the dirt. Poor as a third world country.--these two should be combined into one sentence. You have a lot of repeating words in the same paragraph that really stand out and take away from the intensity of the story--Decides/decided/deciding. THOUGHTS - Nice twist at the end when Curt's meddling backfires and helps Harvey instead. Good use of karma in this aspect. You painted a clear picture of the kind of person Curt is, and how he carried out his plan, even using children to deliver the letters.   
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You responded to this review 07/26/2016 @ 11:03am EDT