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 | Second Chances  [13+] Finding redemption in a second chance.  |
| (4.5)| Review brought to you by: "Game of Thrones" by Gaby  PLOT - Darren likes Melanie, but follows peer pressure and winds up hurting her just as the others are doing. He feels terrible about it and looks for a way to tell her how he feels, apologize and make it up to her. SETTING - Nice setting at the end when he sings to her and the crowd gathers around, including his ex-girlfriend. CHARACTERS - The story revolves around Darren as he makes a bad choice and does something big to regain the attentions of Melanie. He is desperate to apologize and make things right between them. Nice added element of humor between the pair. GRAMMAR/SPELLING/DIALOGUE - Dialog flowed well and was natural. THOUGHTS - I liked that Darren had watched how his father made amends to his mother, and took that a step further. Writing a song filled with emotions to tell the girl he likes how he feels is a big deal. Doing it in public is a big deal as well. It worked for, and he got his happy ending. Nice job adding the ex in there for added effect. It's a typical scenario as ex's go, seeing something they missed the first time around that rekindles buried feelings. Melanie has a sense of humor and good heart as she gives Darren his second chance. Write on!  
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