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 | Me and Dad, and the worn out sparkplug  [E] Another tall but true story from my younger days  |
| (4.5)| Review brought to you by: "Game of Thrones" by Gaby  PLOT - A father and son work to get an old saw up and running. SETTING - Ahhh, Doc, you had me laughing at the scene you painted of you and your father. I loved the visuals of the looks you give one another that have such meaning behind them. I felt so bad for your dad as he got knocked on his butt a few times trying to get that motor started. CHARACTERS - You and your father have a wonderful relationship from what I've read here. Your dad has that uncanny ability to never give up when he wants something done. You try your best to help, even knowing that it's going to turn out bad. GRAMMAR/SPELLING/DIALOGUE - I said, Llooking at dad’s old saw bench in the behind the house.---missing something here It hasn’t run in months,”--missing front quote, change comma to period He followed us as far as the saw bench before abandoning us for the shade of theback fence. He finished unwrapping the vicious machine like a six year old at Christmas, finally exposing exposing the vivid blue Briggs and Stratton engine. Dialog was great! Very comical. THOUGHTS - Loved this piece. I see there are more stories like it and I can't wait to read a few more. Wonderful job retelling this tale, and how it all played out. Write on!   
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