Hi Andy~hating university ,

This review is a part of "Game of Thrones"  [13+].

Overall Impression:

This is a lovely poem, dear Andy. It made me feel all Christmassy - yes, in July!

This poem describes a Christmas scene, using imagery that most of us will be familiar with: the snow (and snowmen), holly, fairy lights, the turkey, the pudding, carol singers, the reindeer, sleigh bells. They weave a peaceful image of the perfect Christmas, one that I think we all long for. One that truly brings a sense of goodwill to all to the reader.

On the technical side of things I think that you have done a great job. I enjoyed the rhythm and flow of the piece. I liked the presentation and your use of a larger font - always appreciated. I love your use of punctuation, as this assists the overall clarity. And I love how you allow the capitalisation at the beginning of each line to depend upon the individual sentences within the piece. This perfects the overall clarity and reading experience.

Suggestions:

I have no suggestions about the poem's content. It works for me.

The only tiny suggestion I would make is this:

Stanza 3:

I would change the capital "D" in the fourth line to a lowercase "d". That is because, as I mentioned above, you've allowed the capitalisation at the beginning of each line to depend on the individual sentences within the poem. That fourth line is part of an ongoing sentence.

My Rating:

As you can no doubt tell, I like this poem. I'm now humming a Christmas carol.

I did have one suggestion, but it's such a tiny thing that I am not going to lower the rating for that. I think your poem deserves a 5 out of 5, so that is what I am going to give it.

Thank you for sharing your work, and write on!

Kit



My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .