Hi Shanachie , This review is a part of "Game of Thrones" [13+]. Overall Impression: I like this poem, Medie. It speaks of different forms of love, and you are right - love is such a simple word, but it can take on many different shapes, and invoke many different feelings. This poem speaks of five of them - first love, the love that comes with friendship, the love that is meant to be eternal, a mother's love, and the love found in noble sacrifice. The imagery you use is straightforward and effective - it's easy to picture. On the technical side of things, this poem reads well. It has an easy, fast rhythm and flow. You have done a good job with it. Suggestions: I do have a couple of suggestions, dear Medie: Stanza 5: I think that in the fourth line, "Nobel" should be "Noble". General suggestions: I would be tempted to add some more punctuation to this poem. A comma after the first two lines in each stanza, and either a colon or semicolon at the end of each third line. I think that this would assist the flow and overall clarity. I would then allow the capitalisation at the beginning of each line to depend upon the individual sentences within the piece, to perfect the overall clarity and reading experience. My Rating: This is a good poem. I enjoyed the read. I did have some suggestions, but two out of three were more of a matter of personal preference. I will give this poem a rating of 4.5 out of 5. Thank you for sharing your work, and write on! Kit My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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