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 GRYPHONIS REX, The 1st Gryphon Open in new Window. [13+]
The Life Of GRYPHOS, The 1st Gryphon { Originally for The Mythical Creature Contest }
by Onyx: a PURPLE MANIAC! Author Icon
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Title of Work: : Gryphonis Rex, The 1st Gryphon (Short Story, Fantasy)
Author of Work: : Onyx: a Purple Maniac
Date: : July 31, 2016

Plot:
The first installment of the life of Gryphos, the first one exist.

Scene/Setting:
First we are in the laboratory tower of Kelzen, a great wizard and the one who brought Grypho's into the world, as the only one. He has been asked by the ruler of the area to make more so that they can help to protect the world. Gryphos I would say is at the stage of an young adult when the story starts. He is starting to state how he feels and what he thinks the world should be like. He tells his "father" that he will not be treated as a slave. He will be his own being. His "father" loves him and is proud of the being he has become. Gryphos can see great distances. He sees poachers off in the distance, going after the unicorn heard. He tells his "father" he will go and protect them. He takes off with a might roar and quickly flys away.

Zyphrern, the great Unicorn stallion, is trying desperately to lead his group away from the poachers, humans who have decided the Nyldraan Forest, is not as scarry a place as they originally thought it to be. Maeryn, a Faerie enchantress who made the unicorns is not around. Zyphrern, wishes she was, because then he would not have to lead the herd away so quickly. He is able to keep the herd ahead of the poachers, but now cannot figure out where to take them.

Characters:
Kelzen - wizard and father to the dragon Gryphos
Gryphonis Rex - first of his kind
Maeryn - Faerie enchantress of unicorns
Zyphrern - the great unicorn stallion
Draara - Zyphrern's daughter

Suggestions:
I like the set up of this story. You have opened up a great many possibilities on where you can take it. I look forward to reading more.

Character Count: 1,546 (tags = 173 Characters above this point)
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