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Hi Dhu-Glas , This review is a part of "Game of Thrones" [13+]. Overall Impression: This is a fun, sweet poem, dear author. It made me smile. The poem opens with a familiar line, but then the second line immediately holds a contemporary twist. That is cleverly done. In this day and age, cell phone calls and text messages would be flying through the air, with people wishing the other a good holiday season. I like how you add warmth to this piece, and a touch of what Christmas is really all about - that special birth. And the joy we tend to feel around that season, and the hope for the new year. On the technical side of things, this poem reads well. I like its rhythm and flow. It has a nice presentation, and I like your use of punctuation as this assists the overall clarity and reading experience. Well done! Suggestions: I have no suggestions about the poem's content. I like it just the way it is. The only thing I'd suggest is allowing the capitalisation at the beginning of each line to depend upon the individual sentences within the piece. This would perfect the overall clarity and reading experience. My Rating: A lovely poem that was a joy to read, thank you! I did have one suggestion, but that's more of a personal preference. So, I will still give this item a rating of 5 out of 5. Thank you for sharing your work, and write on! Kit My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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