Hello, Reviewing for Game of Thrones, I wanted to read something a bit spicier than what I have been reading. You might want to look at putting Chapter numbers or Part numbers on your pieces so that if a person like me who was reading the items in this folder wanted to read them in order they could find them easier.
This is a good continuation from your first piece. In Part 1 he drives a 39 Chevy, in part 2 he drives a 40 ford, which is it?
As a continuation from part one you find out that she is the one looking for a roll in the hay. He wants to take things slower, that's cool.
This story is faster paced than the last. What are they looking for in each other? Is sex it? I may have to find part 3 and keep reading to see what happens next.
Slow your sex scene down if you rewrite. I understand this a quickie for HSP and there are word count limits. Slowing down my scenes is a problem I have also, I am working on it but have not perfected it. The story line is good and the characters have realism.
I don't think I wrote this in the last review. Thank you for sharing, keep writing.


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