Greetings {huser: jeff is Kylo Ren }

I am reviewing {item: 2095466} today as part of the "The Chapter One Competition." .
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Title and Author:

In the interest of clarity, I will be using the following conventions in my review:
Your Words: Bold Black{}
My Impressions as I read: Bold Green
Editing Suggestions:Bold Red

Plot::
A woman who loves to surf operates a detective agency. She is straight forward and very honest.

Hook:
Beginning hook has us wondering who is surfacing so early in the morning. We want to find out about the person

Characters Development:

Kenna Kitada - surfer and private dective
Other surfers
Mrs. Ingersoll - client


Dialogue:
There was not much dialogue but I definitely knew who was talking at any given time.

Punctuation and Structure:
... be a total douchebag. (two words) We were ...

“That may be true,” Kenna said, “But (word is not capped unless you put a period after ... said) it’s no excuse to drop in on someone’s wave.”

... how many different styles and sizes of house (add an "s") could exist side by side ...

... back in the 1960s (need an apostrophy) when ...

Dressed in jeans and a henley,(need capitalization on name) she completed...

Kenna locks locked up and heads headed (you need to stay in present tense with these two words) to the gray Ford Explorer.

Closing Statement
You did a good job at telling us what type of person Kenna is... I found I really like her. You also did a good job introducing her. The one problem I have with the chapter though is you are trying to give all the information about her at the same time. The whole chapter feels like just an introduction. Maybe you could have her unwinding from a stressful job she just finished or something along that line. There needs to be more of a punch to the first chapter, I personally think. Thank you for submitting.

Starling