Hello, Steve adding writing to ntbk.

What I liked

Cool concept. Interesting how you were inspired. Great structure, too.

What might need work

I'm not clear about what you meant about a star losing its core. I'm no astrophysicist, but it strikes me that stars haven't lost a core to my knowledge.

Will it be while I'm still here on another day? - did you mean 'or' rather than 'on' here?

Thank you for sharing!

Best wishes,

Bob




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