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 | As Robots We Seem to Be Made to Suffer  [E] C3PO made his famous declaration in the very first Star Wars movie to be screened in 1977.  |
| (4.5)| Thank you for participating in the "Invalid Item" contest! I am reviewing your poem as promised. My review is intended to be helpful and encouraging. Please accept it in the spirit it is given. ** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only ** Prompt:"We seem to be made to suffer. It's our lot in life." ~Star Wars (1977) First impression: First thing I noticed was that this poem was written on my birthday, which made it an extra treat for me. This poem is fun to read, especially out loud. The peppy and upbeat meter is controlled by the easy flow that naturally takes over. The scenes that you created come alive and allows your readers to see what the life of a robot is really like. Highlighting the social mishaps that robots experience (trash can jokes) brought more of the human element to the description of a robots life for me. Favorite Stanza: It is hard to pick a favorite stanza so I decided on two. Poor '3PO has lost his head and body fell apart, Then R2D2 dragged like lead his head to body part. He kicks his friend and hurts his toe, He's angry and he's smart, He walks away and doesn't know the "trash can" stories start. Why: It reminds me of how a lot of us have felt at one time or another ....a mess, clumsy and falling a part. This part of your poem really brought to my mind that maybe robots are not that robotic at all...or at least are more human than they appear. Does this poem reference the prompt?: Yes Suggestions: None Final thoughts: This poem is masterfully written with a meter that is easy to follow and keep, allowing the reader to focus on the imagery that is expertly painted. A really entertaining polished piece. This concludes my review. Thank you for allowing me the pleasure of reading and reviewing your work and for participating in my contest. I wish you continued success with your writing and in life. Good luck in the contest! Write on, read on, rate on!~ Taryn
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