What an interesting topic and well-done peace. Thank you for writing this.

The only part I'm not sure about is, "Oh, how they were loved, and never more than when their faces could be seen no more." I'm not sure I love "more" being used twice there. Or at least "...and never more than when their faces couldn't be seen anymore." That way you still get a connection to "more" but it also seems like a different word. Just my opinion, but obviously this is a wonderful piece since it got nominated for a Quills Award. AWESOME! CONGRATULATIONS!!! That's actually where I found this.

Great job and good luck with Quills!

My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .