Hi maryccasey

I am reviewing your poem, "Invalid Item"  as part of "I Write in December-January-February" .

My first thought when I opened up this poem was I love it. It's so appealing, with the orange writing which represents the orange fruit the poem describes. It feels sunny and warm and reminds me of summer. The photo you have used for this poem adds to this feeling.

As a Than-Bauk, this works brilliantly. The creeping "ine" sound is spot on. It reminds me of a vine, creeping up the poem.

I love the last line! "all mine, sweet juice!" This makes me want some freshly squeezed orange juice right now. I can almost taste its sweetness already.

I really like this Than-Bauk. I know how difficult it is to get these poems just right, but you have done it effortlessly. Really great job!

Choconut





My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .