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 Mother Nature's Gift Open in new Window. [E]
Stormy's Poetry Contest - For March Newsletter
by 💙 Carly-wrimo 2024 Author Icon
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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*RainbowL* Just a reminder I am here to review and give suggestions. Any of which are my opinion and you can use them or not. Both are given with reverence for your style of writing and hope to help not just you but myself as well. If you have any questions about the review or suggestions don't be afraid to reply, email, or IM me in response. We are all learning to be better writers, including myself. *Smile*


*Leaf2g* Good Points:
The poem is very descriptive and I like the images you've made.

*Leaf2r* Grammatical Problems?
There aren't really any grammatical problems which cause me to stop reading at any point.

*Leaf2o* Overall Characterization and World View:
The poem flows well and things are in a well-defined order. The only thing wich threw me for a moment was that you had the Clouds colliding first before the mother at the beach. But that's just a personal frame of mind for me.

*Leaf2br* Suggestions:
My only suggestion would be to break the poem up into stanzas for an easier read.

*Yinyang* Last but not Least:*BigSmile*
As mentioned before a well-written poem and I liked the ending. It's certainly a different way to view the image of lightning in stone.

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