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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
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Thank you, Kerri, for the privilege of reviewing your interesting conversation.

*Earth*Overall Impression: Life is certainly like that, when teenagers inhabit the home, especially homes with two or more teenagers. (Of course, this could be the scenario if the daddy is still a bit of a teenager at heart.) ;)

*Pencil*Suggestions: The change of font color was helpful to keep tract of the speaker. However, my personal comfort zone would have preferred having a line of blank space in between the speakers as well. Having been on this Earth for more than half a century, I am finding that any help for my visual acuity is greatly appreciated. *Cool*

*Apple*Punctuation/Spelling/Grammar: Nothing in this area jumped out at me as a problem. I think we're good here.

*Heart*What I Like: I like the fact that you are accurate about the typical arguments between self-centered individuals, which includes some teenagers, without degrading to gratuitous violence for whatever reason just to warrant the ASR rating. The story line didn't need anything more or other than the elements you included. It's well-written. Nicely done. WRITE ON!

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