Hello, alfred booth, wanbli ska !

I'm offering you this review in celebration of Earth Day, which is marked on the 22^nd April every year, and on behalf of "The Earth Day Challenge" 

Thank you for being aware of our planet and the environment.

What I liked

Awesome use of the ghazal structure to emphasise where the fault lays and where the ax falls with global climate change. I love the rhythm of this poem and how you have faithfully adhered to the ghazal form.

I particularly like your clever use of enjambement to skip from one couplet to the next, and the clever midpoint turn with "other banks count as greed sways against loss" where you shift from environmental to economic concerns.

I love the last two couplets, specifically your use of "watch" to mean something different and effectively SHOW indifference in the first, and then the wonderful contrast in the final couplet, a poem in its own right, where you show the pathetic attitude of the rich westerners in the first line, who maybe might do something possibly, and the real suffering of those effected by climate change elsewhere.

What might need work

There's nothing really to "fault" in this ghazal. If I'm being picky, I'd point out that to me "homeless on watch / around the clock TV news reports with theatrical stun" cries out for a period after "clock", but I can see you're making the whole poem one long and interconnected sentence just as we're all connected on Earth by the environment.

Thank you for sharing!

Best wishes,

Bob






My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .