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 Happy Earth Day Amy! Guess who showed up on Read And Review page and in time for Earth day?   The title is clear to indicate the topic and the genres suit the piece as well. I imagine you could use Nature as well.  Catching this article spurred my mind to think of the work of spring and I was curious to hear your ideas for keeping Gardens green. You position yourself with all gardeners in the first paragraph as you share you love of it and then begin to define an expanded meaning of green. I think gardeners who love the earth would be keen to take it a step further. Your title now has greater meaning.   In the second paragraph you seem to repeat ideas---eg that is it easy. Maybe tighten this up abit. You could combine the two lines... "It involves.....garden and a slight change in ..".  You have some really practical ideas and they reminded me of what my dad did with our big veggie garden. In the country well water could be low in the summer so rainbarrels were vital and watering in evening was important so the hot sun did not just dry it all up in the day. That might be an idea to add to your article. And if you can't compost, getting farm manoeur is wholesome!   In "and bees and butterflies" there is a typo. It should be "as bees.."  I would do a quick edit for missing commas in phrases. I wonder if you need so much space between your paragraphs. It feels distracting when I read. I wanted to read a period after "possible" to let the idea sink in and then give potency to the next suggestion with "Create".  I like your summary under planting and the added bit about bbq and recycled sitting places! You really have thoughtful ideas. Your tone is instuctive with a touch of enthusiasm for your topic and it was pleasant to read the soft yet vital message for those who will hear. I enjoyed this article and it was so good to imagine us getting back to simple natural ways. Thanks for sharing your tribute to this notion.Light on the path as you write on! eyestar  
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