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 |  | Hidden Treasures  [E] She waits for those who will see. (Form: Sapphic Ode)  |
| (4.5)  Happy Earth Day huntersmoon! What a wonderful mix of mystery, fantasy and earth magics, truly a gift to Gaia! You created a imaginative response to the prompt and used a form I may have heard of long ago but never wrote one! So this is interesting. Thanks for the author's note!   Wow! You really have a gift with words as this flows so potently as I read it aloud. The flow and soundscape were so pleasant and did justice to the Sapphic Ode. I was drawn into the revery with ease as I followed the dreamy voice. You created a vibrant atmosphere as you show us the invisible realm.   I was struck by the poetic conventions like consonance (especially the soothing s), Or l in Litany of fabled lore" etc, assonance as in "long thought lost...embossed" and the alliteration like "perdu presence"! Your rhyme was right on as well. The vocabulary was very interesting and effective in sound and building this world. Descriptions were vivid with words like "glimmering" and "covert"and cool rhymes with "unexpected" and "embossed".  I was really taken with the short end lines too. Each verse was coherent and added to the vision of Gaia's secrets. Your message that we are blind can be so true in this fast paced world where magic seems forgotten.  I love the vision in the clouds and the query word "reality". It gives me pause to ponder what is reality and is there more than meets the physical eye! I think so!   Punctuation was purproseful and added to the reading. I did wonder at the period in the first line as the rest of your similar lines have semi colons. Is it for a stronger effect?There is a depth and nuance that strikes me the more I play in your world here. It activates my muse so your magic has worked!  Thanks for sharing your craft and opening the door to other visions.  Light on the path as you write on!eyestar 
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You responded to this review 04/24/2017 @ 10:55am EDT