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 | KENTUCKY BLUEGRASS  [E] Remembering the soft green grass in the yards of Ohio, my home.  |
| (5.0)   Happy Earth Day!    I so enjoyed reading this soft toned poem appreciative of the green grass of your home. It is so cool to create a painting of a specific picture in your mind.The first line held my attention and drew me in with its vivid image, comparison and assonance of "sprout" and "proud". I felt I was in for a treat and was not disappointed.Each line bears one more aspect of the beloved grassy land to create a realistic and picturesque atmosphere, with colour, sound and image.  The personification of the elements is well done and the "prancing of the children" mimics the joy that emanates from your vision. I love walking barefoot in grass!  According to your author's note on the form I see you have constructed it effectively. The rhymes are appealing and your use of poetic techniques like assonance and consonance really added to the sound and sensual appeal of the oral reading! Excellent. You are very thorough in your capturing the essence of this place as even at the end you give an idea of how the land is used. Using "money" to rhyme with earlier words is brilliant.The last phrases gives us a clue as to the history of the fields, the longevity of use and joy of the land there. Beautiful sentiment.  Thanks for sharing this masterfully crafted expression and sharing your back yard with such affection. Light on the path as you write on!eyestar 
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You responded to this review 04/24/2017 @ 2:39pm EDT