Hello, Grateful Jess!

I'm offering you this review in celebration of Earth Day, which is marked on the 22^nd April every year, and on behalf of "The Earth Day Challenge" 

Thank you for being aware of our planet and the environment.

What I liked

I love the description of the Science March that you offer in your poem and your brave attempt to write a villanelle - a really demanding form.

What might need work

Though it seems a strange requirement to me, the contest rules mention putting a word count into your static item. I used both a word count and a line count in mine to make sure I was covered.

Consider editing your lines so that each has the same number of syllables, ideally ten. At the moment, yours range from 9 to 12. A classical villanelle will use iambic pentametre, so if you have a good ear, you might like to attempt to use that metre.

I think that Commander in Chief is traditionally capitalised because it's a title and form of address.

Thank you for sharing!

Best wishes,

Bob






My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .