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Wisp Open in new Window. [E]
As it is floating upon the gentle wind, the Wisp looks to grant a wish.
by w0lfbane Author Icon
Review of Wisp  Open in new Window.
In affiliation with Earth Day Challengers  Open in new Window.
Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hi w0lfbane

My name is Ken and I'm it is my pleasure to read and comment on your work "Wisp" Open in new Window. on behalf of "Earth Day Challengers" Open in new Window..

*Flower1* First Impression/Thoughts:
It's the little miracles of nature that we find both intriguing and fascinating.

*Flower3* Creativity/Impact:
Not an overt statement on conservation or the plight of nature, it nonetheless captures a spirit and feeling of awe. Nicely done.

*Flower4* Message/Theme:
*FacePalm* Uhhh, Earth Day? *Laugh* Seriously, you've captured the wonder of nature with this simple tale of how nature nurtures us.

*Flower2* Technique/Technical Notes: I offer you the following as food for thought and not as criticism. I encourage you to consider what I offer but always follow your instinct and heart. You are the poet.

*Vine1* Title: I thought this was a creative title; certainly is will catch the attention of readers. The "teaser" line (or description *Smile*) offers an opportunity to add some clarification and can also be a great tool to attract more readers. Again, very creative and informative.

*Vine1* Grammar/Wording: Your language is well measured and reinforces your message. I thought you captured the feeling of wonder well in this and the images are clear.

*Vine1* Form/Flow: You wrote this in a joined couplet rhyme with a hanging final line for emphasis. Your meter is problematic but didn't impede the nice rhythmic feel of the poem.

*Flower6* Overall Rating/Final Thoughts:
*Star**Star**Star**Star**Halfstar* An enjoyable, wonder filled read. Your recognition of the magical moments of nature and your appreciation (and patience *Laugh*) are clear in your words. Thank you for sharing your imagination and talent with me today.

Writing is about communication and this is what I saw in your work and is provided solely for your use. It's offered in a spirit of wanting to give you honest feedback... nothing more.

Keep writing! Wishing you all the best for Earth Day 2017,

Ken

Everyday is Earth Day!

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