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What I liked
I think this is a really great take on the old "the world is a stage" metaphor. I love to see Winter and Spring together on that stage and acting out the transition from winter to spring.
What might need work
A few minor concerns:
the curtains arise, - this line kinda literally means that the curtains were pooled on the floor and then they stood up by themselves. I think you mean, "the curtains rise".
Spring and winter meet center stage. - you capitalised Spring to emphasise your personification, but why not Winter?
The audience arises, yelling “Bravo”, - use standard punctuation for speech, ie. yelling, "Bravo."
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