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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hello, Mari McKee!

I'm offering you this review in celebration of Earth Day, which is marked on the 22nd April every year, and on behalf of "The Earth Day ChallengeOpen in new Window.

Thank you for being aware of our planet and the environment.

What I liked

I think this is a really great take on the old "the world is a stage" metaphor. I love to see Winter and Spring together on that stage and acting out the transition from winter to spring.

What might need work

A few minor concerns:

the curtains arise, - this line kinda literally means that the curtains were pooled on the floor and then they stood up by themselves. I think you mean, "the curtains rise".

Spring and winter meet center stage. - you capitalised Spring to emphasise your personification, but why not Winter?

The audience arises, yelling “Bravo”, - use standard punctuation for speech, ie. yelling, "Bravo."

Thank you for sharing!

Best wishes,

Bob *BigSmile*

April 22nd is Earth Day!


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