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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hi Stephen Scorer

My name is Ken and I'm pleased to read and comment on your work "Invalid Item" Open in new Window. on behalf of "Earth Day Challengers" Open in new Window..

*Flower1* First Impression/Thoughts:
Nicely done. A lovely poem about the coming of spring. I agree - "Whichever season, it is unique."

*Flower3* Creativity/Impact:
Yes, this subject has been covered ad naseum by poets but these are you impressions and thoughts. That makes it uniquely yours.

*Flower4* Message/Theme:
*FacePalm* Uhhh, Earth Day? *Laugh* Seriously, you've captured the changes that occur and celebrate the "rebirth" of the Earth.

*Flower2* Technique/Technical Notes: I offer you the following as food for thought and not as criticism. I encourage you to consider what I offer but always follow your instinct and heart. You are the poet.

*Vine1* Title: Straight forward. I thought it could have been a little more creative, to catch the attention of readers. The "teaser" line (or description *Smile*) offers an opportunity to add some clarification and can also be a great tool to attract more readers. Again, not very creative but informative.

*Vine1* Grammar/Wording: Your language is well thought out and colorful, bringing to mind the images of spring. I particularly enjoyed "Bluebells rise with delightful chimes." which I found humorous and striking.

*Vine1* Form/Flow: Written in Quatrains with an abab rhyme, I thought this flowed well. Your rhymes were solid but I felt you were holding back a bit from really opening up and finding the joy in your writing. Sometimes, just go for it. Let your imagination run wild as with the bluebells. *Laugh*

*Flower6* Overall Rating/Final Thoughts:
*Star**Star**Star**Star* An enjoyable read that spoke of winter's passing and the arrival of spring. Thank you for sharing your imagination and talent with me today.

Writing is about communication and this is what I saw in your work and is provided solely for your use. It's offered in a spirit of wanting to give you honest feedback... nothing more.

Keep writing! Wishing you all the best for Earth Day 2017,

Ken

Everyday is Earth Day!

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