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 One Nice Sunny Day Open in new Window. [18+]
It is more than love
by writergeorge Author Icon
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Rated: 18+ | (3.5)
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Hello writergeorge,

I saw that this is your anniversary month with WDC. This is your ninth year with us.


Overall Impression: At first it didn't look like this story was going to go into the Gay/Lesbian genre because it was involving a so-called straight couple. But as the story progressed I realized I was wrong. This is a Gay/Lesbian story sort of but at the same time, it isn't. I still think that you did a great job with it, though.

The Story Itself: A couple, Beth and Mark, go to the park to have a picnic. While they are having it they see two males walking through the park holding hands and appearing romantic toward each other. And they comment on that. What Mark doesn't know is that Beth had a lesbian encounter in college. In fact, it read like it was more than just an encounter. I think you did a great job with this story. The only think I would have changed with is was a space between the paragraphs.

Location, Location, Location: The location for this story was a park. I think you did a very good job describing it too.

Your Characters: Of Course, Beth and Mark are the main characters in this story. There were a few others mentioned. But they were only mentioned. I liked that you gave your characters a name. A lot of writers don’t do that. Personally, I try to give all my characters a name. Especially, the main ones. I think that it makes them feel more real if they have a name.

How They Spoke: There wasn't a lot of dialogue in this story. But there was some. And what dialogue there was looked good. At least it did to me.

Grammar, Spelling, Missing Words: I don't think putting a space in between paragraphs is a grammar error or not. But you might want to check into that.

Any Last Thoughts: When I first starting reading this story and it was about a so-called straight couple I thought that it was going to be a gay bashing story. I'm glad that I was wrong.


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Thank you for sharing this story with WDC. And sharing it especially with me. Keep on writing great stories like this one.

                                       PureSciFi aka spacefaction
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