House Florent "Game of Thrones" 

A review for "The Iron Bank of Braavos" 

Hi

My name is Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am one of the sly foxes.

Title: The Island of Imagination/ Hallucination

First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with the speaker tripping over something as she moved from under a coconut palm.

What needs your attention: A typo in this phrase, I’ve not mistaken, I suggest changing I've to I'm because it is a better fit in the meaning of the sentence. Another thing that needs attention in this story is the tool that was supposed to be with the two people. The tool was never found, so the type of tool could not be determined.

What part I liked best: I like the part where Hanna changes the weather from hot to cool by just thinking about it. I like that part because I would like to have a power like that, especially in summer.

Overall impression: In this story, two WDC members find themselves on a deserted island sitting under a coconut palm. The interaction and conversation among the characters moves the plot forward at a good pace while building toward the laughter. I enjoyed reading this amusing story because it made me smile, and in a couple of places laugh. One of the places that made me laugh was when Hanna and Elycia figured out they were in a Game of Thrones prompt. Write on.

Thank you for allowing me to read your work. It has been my pleasure.

My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .