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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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OVERALL IMPRESSION -
Good family dynamics between the sisters in this short story. Their closeness really made this story.

WHAT I LIKED BEST -
I liked Cora and how she couldn't bring herself to use her powers for bad. She's wise for a ten-year-old. I also liked how close the girls were.

PLOT~
Cora and Henny are little girls born into a family of assassins that use magic to complete their tasks. Cora is only ten and malnourished for her age because she cannot seem to use her magic the way her older sister Henny can. Henny is about to leave on another mission and is desperate for Cora to learn how to turn an orb into a ball of flame. Cora is struggling because she wants to use her powers for good. Henny vows to find her sister another family to live with before she heads off.

CHARACTER~
Henny is smart and recognizes that if something doesn't change fast, her sister will be killed. Cora cannot bring herself to use her magic to do bad things, and I believe she hides that fact that she is capable of doing the same things Henny can.

DIALOG~
This worked well and felt natural as the girls discussed magic and their family dynamic. Henny didn't even hesitate when Cora spoke about her feelings when it came to their magical powers.

TECHNICAL~
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