Hi Izzy, I am reviewing your short story "Everything Has Changed" on the behalf of Game of Thrones here on WDC. ♥ Love and Reese begins a new relationship. Both Love and Reese were and still are childhood friends who slowly slid into love. This was a fast and easy story of first love romance. I really liked the Swedish spelling of Love, it's so pretty. ♥ Things I noticed/specific suggestions: I did spot a few areas of concern in regards to punctuation, and I do believe that your sentence structure needs just a little more work. For example: All I knew this morning when I woke Is I know something now, know something now I didn't before. I think the sentence would read/sound better if it was stated like: All I knew that morning when I awoke Is that I know (knew?) something now, that I didn't know before. ♥ Spelling/Grammar: I spotted no common spelling errors, the grammar that I did notice are minor things. ♥ Overall: There were some grammar errors contained within, but I think they are minor enough that they do not detract from the story at hand. I enjoyed the poems written and I liked what you did with that particular aspect of the story. This review was given freely in thanks for a writing that was written freely House Greyjoy - "Game of Thrones"
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