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OVERALL IMPRESSION -
You were creative with the prompt and I found it rather creepy at the end when John attacks her.

WHAT I LIKED BEST -
Turn about is fair play. Loved how that protein comment came back to haunt John and that she managed to fight back. I would do the same thing.

PLOT~
A woman on vacation follows John overboard a cruise ship. They wash up on a beach, and John has lost most of his energy. The woman is all right, and starts looking for food as John slowly begins to lose his mind. Before long it becomes a battle between the two for life, as John complains he needs protein and attacks his woman.

CHARACTER(S)~DESCRIPTION~
John loses his strength and his mind after going overboard the ship. He goes to extremes attacking her, and leaves her no choice but to fight back. She is the stronger of the two, and that works to her advantage on the deserted island.

I could picture the vines made into a trap, and John's attack with the knife.

DIALOG~
It was easy to see them bickering as they searched for food. The evil laugh had me laughing after the protein comment returned.

TECHNICAL~
The yells were came from- were coming from, or came from
House Greyjoy image for G.o.T.

This would be my name.
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