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OVERALL IMPRESSION -
This was a really interesting story of aliens among us, looking for places to hide and blend in.

WHAT I LIKED BEST -
The great descriptions. You really pulled this off in the short word count and gave a perfect visual of Neebo.

PLOT~
Orbie is thankful that another show has come to close and begins to remove his contact lens, the dirt that covered him for effect and combs his only hair. He heads outside, ready to go back home and escape the traveling side show. Earth is his vacation spot, and it seems that right now, he's destined to stay here. He decides maybe a trip to Texas to work at a space museum might be good for him and rises into the sky.

CHARACTER(S)~DESCRIPTION~
Orbie/Neebo who has grown tired of the side show. You do really well with descriptions. I even felt sorry for the poor alien having to endure changing his appearance just to blend in. He showed his optimism by thinking Texas might be a good place to vacation next.

DIALOG~
Orbie talking to himself and revealing who and what he is.

TECHNICAL~
appendages that looked hair but weren’t. --looked hairy, or looked like hair

hear there's one in
House Greyjoy image for G.o.T.

This would be my name.
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