Hi Jacky, I am reviewing your story "Eclipse" on the behalf of Game of Thrones here on WDC.

♥ This cute story is about two animals, lions. One day they are outside and it starts getting dark early. One lion thinks that the sun is broken and the lions begin to discuss why they believe the sun is broken. After awhile, the sky begins to get lighter and lighter and the lions moved on to their more immediate need, whats for dinner.

♥ Things I noticed/specific suggestions: Everything seems to be well written, I have nothing to suggest for you at this time.

♥ Spelling/Grammar: I did not spot any common spelling or grammar errors.


♥ Overall: I enjoyed the two lions chat. One part caused a chuckle to come out, when one of the lions kinda became hysterical at the thought of being dark all the time. I could not help but think, look at these big bad lions acting like house tamed pussy cats. It was cute, I really enjoyed this short story. Thank you!

This review was given freely in thanks for a writing that was written freely

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