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| (5.0)| Review brought to you by: "Game of Thrones" by Creeper Of The Realm  OVERALL IMPRESSION - Another gripping tale that had me sitting here with my mouth hanging open. You really command your readers full attention and don't let them go until the very last word. WHAT I LIKED BEST - All of it. Everything stood out. PLOT~ Jessica is pissed that Nick has cheated on her and takes his phone, smashing it on the floor. Nick doesn't have much to say for his actions. Jessica yells at him, but he only offers an insincere apology. In his mind, their relationship has been over long ago. Jessica doesn't see it that way and storms off into their bedroom. Nick collapses on the floor and the next thing he knows, the police are at the door. CHARACTER(S)~DESCRIPTION~ Nick who feels their break up is a long time coming. Jessica is beside herself knowing he's thrown their relationship away over another woman. Nick is completely blindsided by the police when they show up unexpectedly, and once he's in the squad car, his mind replays things he didn't remember. Great descriptions. I could see that phone screen shattering on the floor and Nick sliding down there as well. When the memories came of him possibly killing her he was a broken man. Great job. DIALOG~ Their argument played out well. Nick's inner thoughts added another dimension to the scene as Jessica demanded answers Nick just could not bring himself to give.   
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